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Old 10-16-07, 11:27 PM
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Originally Posted by genec
Actually going back and rereading it, it is obvious that there is a discontinuous thought going on there... the asterisk doesn't refer back to a word in the paragraph, and the colon implies a list, which in this case, is only a single term, "stripe," with multiple examples of stripe types.

Not good writing at all... but then this was cut and pasted out of context, and it was probably written in a hurry.

Critique of internet blogs and forum responses as "good writing" is hardly a fair subject as that writing is often done in haste and to represent thoughts of the moment.

At least we haven't sunk to R U OK?
I figured the asterisk denotes the first item on a list of things that define the 'margin', and the rest were trimmed from the quote.

But the specific details of the editing are kind of inconsequential. The point was to show that exactly the same thing could've been said with far fewer words and a far higher readability, not to mention far fewer points of possible contention.
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