Old 09-10-09, 05:28 PM
Brian Sorrell
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I like the idea plenty well. My gentle critique would be that you tell the reader what to think too often. For example: "...cycling just isnít about riding a bike and getting in some training miles..." The reader should *get* that from the story; you don't need to tell the reader what the story tells.
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