50+ Cycling Haiku
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50+ Cycling Haiku
I'll start...
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Promising to ride our age
For rewards of pie.
~~~
Snug on the saddle
Wind at my back, sun shining
Helmet hair today.
~~~
As the sun rises
I slip outside with my bike
To slice through the mist.
~~~
I get older, yes
But cycling reconnects me
To my very first ride.
~~~~
Anyone else wanna try?
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Promising to ride our age
For rewards of pie.
~~~
Snug on the saddle
Wind at my back, sun shining
Helmet hair today.
~~~
As the sun rises
I slip outside with my bike
To slice through the mist.
~~~
I get older, yes
But cycling reconnects me
To my very first ride.
~~~~
Anyone else wanna try?
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Die Straße wartet,
über mir ziehen Wolken.
Rendez-vous am Pass?
Bad translation:
The road waits for me
while clouds are passing by.
Maybe I can meet them at the pass
über mir ziehen Wolken.
Rendez-vous am Pass?
Bad translation:
The road waits for me
while clouds are passing by.
Maybe I can meet them at the pass
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Sailing on the road
My ship rolls on pavement seas
Toward adventure
The pathway is new
Experience says take care
But the bike just laughs
Road bike and race face
I am slow in my own world
The whirlwind passes
Pink neon jersey
Yellow vest, tight spandex shorts
Fashionista hell
My ship rolls on pavement seas
Toward adventure
The pathway is new
Experience says take care
But the bike just laughs
Road bike and race face
I am slow in my own world
The whirlwind passes
Pink neon jersey
Yellow vest, tight spandex shorts
Fashionista hell
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I need more cowbell.
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Originally Posted by jcm
I can't take this anymore! You people have waaaay too much time on your hands! Better go mount up!
Can't take anymore
People have too much free time
Better go mount up!
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Yeah
5-7-5 is OUT!
https://www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm
HAIKU TECHNIQUES
Jane Reichhold
(As published in the Autumn, 2000 issue of Frogpond, Journal of the Haiku Society of America.)
In my early years of haiku writing, I easily accepted the prevalent credo being espoused on how to write haiku. This was, sometimes implied and occasionally expressed, as being: if the author's mind/heart was correctly aligned in the "proper" attitude, while experiencing a so-called "haiku moment", one merely had to report on the experience to have a darn-good haiku.
One reason for rejoicing in the acceptance of this view, was that it by-passed the old 5-7-5 barrier crisis. This was certainly a plus for the whole 70s haiku scene as there seemed a danger of the entire movement bogging down in fights, arguments and broken friendships.
Another advantage of this system of defining a haiku was that it bestowed near-religious honor on the author of a passable haiku. No one knew exactly why a particular haiku was 'good' but it was clear from the ku that the author had experienced a moment of enlightenment (or satori for the Zen inspired). If the moment was holy and the form fit in with the group's philosophy publishing the ku, the haiku was said to be an excellent one. This happened more often if the person judging the ku was a good friend of the haiku's author.
So, saying goodbye to 5-7-5
Sitting at computer
Face all wrapped in tape
Legs yearning for outside jaunt
5-7-5 is OUT!
https://www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm
HAIKU TECHNIQUES
Jane Reichhold
(As published in the Autumn, 2000 issue of Frogpond, Journal of the Haiku Society of America.)
In my early years of haiku writing, I easily accepted the prevalent credo being espoused on how to write haiku. This was, sometimes implied and occasionally expressed, as being: if the author's mind/heart was correctly aligned in the "proper" attitude, while experiencing a so-called "haiku moment", one merely had to report on the experience to have a darn-good haiku.
One reason for rejoicing in the acceptance of this view, was that it by-passed the old 5-7-5 barrier crisis. This was certainly a plus for the whole 70s haiku scene as there seemed a danger of the entire movement bogging down in fights, arguments and broken friendships.
Another advantage of this system of defining a haiku was that it bestowed near-religious honor on the author of a passable haiku. No one knew exactly why a particular haiku was 'good' but it was clear from the ku that the author had experienced a moment of enlightenment (or satori for the Zen inspired). If the moment was holy and the form fit in with the group's philosophy publishing the ku, the haiku was said to be an excellent one. This happened more often if the person judging the ku was a good friend of the haiku's author.
Sitting at computer
Face all wrapped in tape
Legs yearning for outside jaunt
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People!!!! Wake up.....what ever happened to sweat and grease and labored breathing? Our forum is being taken over by poets, flower sniffers, and belly button ruminators. (OK, OK some of us can't find our belly buttons.) Whatever happened to the virile pursuit of speed, sinew, and stong hearts. Put down this namby pamby poet element before it grows.
No bugles no rattling drums
Just whir of tires
And the awakening pink sky...
Hunched bright beetles
Fingering rubies
Where's that damned puncture?
Gary....another cool idea....this is fun and thoughtful....let's hear from more of us...(is WillDehne around to translate Marmotte's?)
No bugles no rattling drums
Just whir of tires
And the awakening pink sky...
Hunched bright beetles
Fingering rubies
Where's that damned puncture?
Gary....another cool idea....this is fun and thoughtful....let's hear from more of us...(is WillDehne around to translate Marmotte's?)
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Sitting on my bike today and thinking:
wheels spinning around
flying past automobiles
the bike is freedom
formerly fat guy
astride gleaming machine
fueled by sweat alone
rotten opossum
squashed snake, beloved family pet
all lie still by road
I spin cranks smoothly
wheels roll forward straight and far
Cappucino after
I love my helmet
it protects my cranium
from substantial harm
wheels spinning around
flying past automobiles
the bike is freedom
formerly fat guy
astride gleaming machine
fueled by sweat alone
rotten opossum
squashed snake, beloved family pet
all lie still by road
I spin cranks smoothly
wheels roll forward straight and far
Cappucino after
I love my helmet
it protects my cranium
from substantial harm
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Originally Posted by cheeseflavor
Sitting on my bike today and thinking:
I love my helmet
it protects my cranium
from substantial harm
I love my helmet
it protects my cranium
from substantial harm
Speaks of what I realize now,
Helmet's left behind.
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Originally Posted by GrannyGear
People!!!! Wake up.....what ever happened to sweat and grease and labored breathing? Our forum is being taken over by poets, flower sniffers, and belly button ruminators. (OK, OK some of us can't find our belly buttons.) Whatever happened to the virile pursuit of speed, sinew, and stong hearts. Put down this namby pamby poet element before it grows.
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Make him cry like a baby!
I beat him again!
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dumb moose standing in lane
stupid turkeys scratching pecking IN THE WAY
pastor praying crash not today
stupid turkeys scratching pecking IN THE WAY
pastor praying crash not today
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Originally Posted by jcm
Old fat lazy puss-gut,
just can't quite reach the drop bars.
My quads burn like fire.
just can't quite reach the drop bars.
My quads burn like fire.
Lungs like bellows blow
Question: How stupid am I?
It's raining sideways.
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to return after many years
the saddle like a long lost friend
I'm a child once again
(5-7-5 lives on....)
B'Dog
the saddle like a long lost friend
I'm a child once again
(5-7-5 lives on....)
B'Dog
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Originally Posted by BubbaDog
to return after many years
the saddle like a long lost friend
I'm a child once again
(5-7-5 lives on....)
B'Dog
the saddle like a long lost friend
I'm a child once again
(5-7-5 lives on....)
B'Dog
8-8-6
It's the syllables that count!
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Originally Posted by DnvrFox
Sorry, that was
8-8-6
It's the syllables that count!
8-8-6
It's the syllables that count!
haiku expert educating
corrected I am....
B'Dog
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Originally Posted by DnvrFox
Sorry, that was
8-8-6
It's the syllables that count!
8-8-6
It's the syllables that count!
five spokes plus two more
make a total of 7 spokes
Ah...two's more than five
Ah, Denver, nothin' like following the rules to make poetry good !
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recumbent I sit
legs spinning against the sky
stationary bike
cardiac challenged
plugged arteries, overweight
I'll ride tomorrow
mountain roads, forests
scenic vistas, sunsets, friends
my Holdsworth calls me
Clydesdales riding bikes
big strong men on bicycles
can't climb worth a damn
old men writing poems
of bicycles, sweat and pain
manly men? damn right!
I really need to get back to work....
legs spinning against the sky
stationary bike
cardiac challenged
plugged arteries, overweight
I'll ride tomorrow
mountain roads, forests
scenic vistas, sunsets, friends
my Holdsworth calls me
Clydesdales riding bikes
big strong men on bicycles
can't climb worth a damn
old men writing poems
of bicycles, sweat and pain
manly men? damn right!
I really need to get back to work....
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Geez,
Twenty-one post! God!
Who would have ever thought it?
Fifty+ Forum is cool!
Tyson
Twenty-one post! God!
Who would have ever thought it?
Fifty+ Forum is cool!
Tyson
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Originally Posted by pastorbobnlnh
dumb moose standing in lane
stupid turkeys scratching pecking IN THE WAY
pastor praying crash not today
stupid turkeys scratching pecking IN THE WAY
pastor praying crash not today
the revised 5-7-5 version (they didn't teach us this stuff in seminary)
dumb moose stands in lane
stupid turkeys IN THE WAY
pastor crash this day
The corrected tragic ending version!
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I need more cowbell.
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Originally Posted by jcm
For my bike, waiting.
Wrong! is this sentence structure!
Yoda I am now!
Wrong! is this sentence structure!
Yoda I am now!
Two days and no ride
Business travel sucks sometimes
Bike waits, patiently.
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