Originally Posted by MarkS
I predict that a single word in your story is about to inundate you with criticism ...
Haha, didn't notice it on first reading. Maybe he was just being descriptive? You know, so we could feel like we were there?
"The trees were rustling in a stiff breeze under a few wispy clouds. It was almost warm and there crowds of people. A distant crow exclaimed."
Obviously, I'm not a writer, but maybe he was just providing some innocent description?