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Old 01-18-05 | 05:54 PM
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foehn
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From: The Alta Loma area of Rancho Cucamonga. About 45 miles east of Los Angeles, California. Uphill, downhill and across hill riding; not too level!
Originally Posted by Swiss Hoser
Nice writing. Really.
I enjoyed the read, once I re-punctuated and structured some paragraphs out of it.
Nice job at the constructive critique.

Gigantic quasi-"stream of thought" paragraphs annoy me too.
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