Photography should not be about the effect or the lens or the camera but about the photographers view of the world. The content is overwhelmed by your post (attempt) all I see in your shots is last years effect poorly done. Your composition is ok.
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This isn't a photography forum though so we can still appreciate that the guy has bothered to take time out to show us the inside of probably the most famous LBS in the world. Yeah, the HDR isn't to everyone's tastes but it's not really the point of the thread.